denwatIs, while I'm normally on the admin's side, there really is way too many spelling and grammar errors here to really say it was a proper check; not including the speech patterns you're referring to, they were quite obvious derps...that being said, it wasn't unreadable as some people were trying to make it sound. I personally found it far more enjoyable than I thought I would, the stories I've read so far (Mirai, Misaki, Shizuka) are all pretty good. Not excellent, but among the better VNs I've read. 8/10.
The scene (I assume) they're referring to involves Ikuya by the shoe lockers; it
