@Chocogami. You just cant escape it, you were made for it, It is your.....destiny.... YOU. ARE. MY. EDITOR.
LOL. Now, on a more serious note:
That was one hell of a feedback, there's plenty of what you said I should work in and I totally agree with your train of thought in the matter.
I do feel the first chapter is very fast paced, mostly because I'm not sure if it's a good idea to introduce characters every other chapter.(I ended
up introducing 3 of them in a single go) This is because I have now 11 chapters to work with 5 ready and 6 to go +1 or 2 for 5th heroine, and
well...1st chapter takes like 50 minutes to read (30 minutes for fast readers)and considering I already have the 4 main routes written down;
I suspect each of them will be 3 to 4 hours long, with Minamoto being the last boss, clocking at 5 hours if not more. My point here is that I really
really, really want to make the story deeper, longer and slower paced. However that endeavour would demand twice the time I have planned to take
in the beginning....but.....you know what? screw it! I will go all out with this VN! I've been working hard on it and new ideas are just coming up and
growing like grass! That said, I will extend the January deadline to simply "sometime in 2014" This will give me plenty of time to concoct the monster
I'm brewing and give the story the justice it deserves. Expect a long read of 30+ hours! I'm really looking forward to it, and I really want you guys to be
there when it happens because without you this would not come to be.
I'm really grateful for your feedback and I'll work on the bits you mentioned ASAP.
Stay in touch, Editor-san!