Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 Update: Current votes for 5th heroine: non loli kuudere - 3 classic tsundere - 2 trap - 1 dandere -1 We already have a kuudere XD 2 kuudere in a single VN? Why do I suspect this will be the winning personality? x3 By the way: PLEASE DO VOTE ON HAIR COLOR, HAIRSTYLE, BODY BUILD AND 3 SIZES. otherwise I will use the finger of creation and give her the looks that match my tastes. :3 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Chocolatemilkgod 16 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 (edited) "I do feel the first chapter is very fast paced, mostly because I'm not sure if it's a good idea to introduce characters every other chapter.(I ended up introducing 3 of them in a single go)" Hmmmm...I mean there's certainly different ways to go about it, sort of depends. It might be the type of thing where you'll have to write a little bit and see whether it works or not. You could have brief glimpses of the other characters in the hallway in previous chapters to not really 'introduce' them as such, but just to give a little bit of playful foreshadowing. Or maybe have a rumour circulate around about one of them just to make the reader a little interested. You might want the other heroine to not actually attend their school, that might be an interesting dynamic (if you want, you could even have them part of a sister school (that's maybe very small?) that borrows some of the facilities so she's an unofficial member of their club...if she even has to be involved with it at all! Just an idea). Also be sure to be careful when writing so that things don't become too...'crowded' with too many heroines. Side characters are a little better in that respect (I mean look at seacats!...mind you, you have to be pretty confident in your ability if you want that many characters), but just a general word of advice. Anywho, still not completely sure what I want the final heroine to be...definitely NOT a trap (sorry yachi), but I probably don't want another kuudere (as much as I love them) or else there might be some characterization steric hindrance. Dunno, sort of depends what sort of character the loli kuudere is since there's mini archetypes (these are often mixed in with each other). 1. Controlled kuudere (One of the common types) - Pretty in control of her emotions, and, as a result, has a cool exterior presented by her emotional control. More subtle actions imply a lot more from her than from other people. Often rather snarky and blunt. May be completely anti-social (borderline dandere?). 2. Just Introverted (Other common type; sort of like me in real life...) - Kuudere appearance to strangers and people she doesn't know that well. Friends will know the person as caring and lovable (hell, even very talkable), but they won't talk much to people outside their close circle of friends; slow to warm up to, can often be cynical and snarky at first. My favourite type 3. Mood-dependent kuudere - May be kuu one day she's in a bad mood and dere the next day. Not my favourite type as it's borderline clinical insanity, but it's a type that exists. 4. Tsun-Kuudere - Akin to yumiko in grisaia (just don't make her route terrible). Can show physical aggressiveness occasionally (especially with people she doesn't know), or can just come off being provocative. More tsun tsun elements can probably be incorperated. 5. Dandere - Yeah, I know it's not kuudere but it's sort of a close offshoot. I tend not to like them as much as kuudere. Or you could have an eccentric and aloof person. Maybe kuu-esque?...Dunno. Throw a scientist and/or tomboy in there for fun maybe. If they're a scientist, make them a biochemist because they're the best types of scientists. Conclusion: I don't know. Edited October 16, 2013 by Chocolatemilkgod Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 Guys, don't forget about this: x3 PLEASE DO VOTE ON HAIR COLOR, HAIRSTYLE, BODY BUILD AND 3 SIZES. otherwise I will use the finger of creation and give her the looks that match my tastes. :3 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
radiantmadness 11 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 Guys, don't forget about this: x3 well, Haircolor/style... Long and (preferably) straight dark hair is my fav by far (my sig, Haru and Tsugumi as example)! As for body build and sizes, dunno just something normal/average. And yes, that's right... I'm bringing a boring and probably too normal opinion in this topic, haha. There will be no 'physically aggressive tsundere', 'non loli kuudere', etc... from me Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 well, Haircolor/style... Long and (preferably) straight dark hair is my fav by far! As for body build and sizes, dunno just something normal/average. And yes, that's right... I'm bringing a boring and probably too normal opinion in this topic, haha. There will be no 'physically aggressive tsundere', 'non loli kuudere', etc... from me You sir, are a man of fine tastes. ;3 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 (edited) Update: Current votes for 5th heroine: non loli kuudere - 3 classic tsundere - 3 trap - 1 dandere -1 We have a tie. Next vote will essentially decide everything so, think carefully before you do. Edited October 16, 2013 by Helvetica Standard Quote Link to post Share on other sites
desi 53 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 Tsugumi, Hanako.. GO! (long dark hair vote) Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 5th heroine appearance FINAL: Straight long Onyx hair, average build, indigo blue eyes, clear skin, humble fronts. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
OneManArmy 82 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 PLEASE DO VOTE ON HAIR COLOR, HAIRSTYLE, BODY BUILD AND 3 SIZES. White, long hair, heterochromia, average high, B cup ... So basically Mary Clarissa Christie lol Edit: Oh the "poll" is already closed? Damn. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Chocolatemilkgod 16 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 (edited) Hope kuudere (of some type) wins (need to have the 'just introverted' type). And blue eyes = Edit: Aw shit OMA, heterochromia (with blue and green eyes) O: Why didn't I think about that before... Edited October 16, 2013 by Chocolatemilkgod Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Maoh 13 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 Aww man another tsundere and/or kuundere? Let's shake things a bit, i vote for a gorgeous dandere girl who is secretly a spy android who came from the future to stop a plot to assasinate Miley Cyrus go Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Chocolatemilkgod 16 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 (edited) Aww man another tsundere and/or kuundere? You're lumping tsundere and kuudere together?! They're completely different entities, blasphemer! Burn the witch! Dandere-Kuudere, maybe...Still prefer introvert lovable kuudere Edited October 16, 2013 by Chocolatemilkgod Quote Link to post Share on other sites
OneManArmy 82 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 I like Dan.dere though. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 (edited) Update: Current votes for 5th heroine: non loli kuudere - 3 classic tsundere - 3 dandere - 2 trap -3 (oh God) We have a tie. Next vote will essentially decide everything so, think carefully before you do. 5th heroine appearance FINAL: Straight long Onyx hair, average build, indigo blue eyes, clear skin, humble fronts. Update: Adding Heterochromia to final heroine (dark green and indigo blue) why? because it's a bloody great idea!!! :DDDDD Edited October 16, 2013 by Helvetica Standard Quote Link to post Share on other sites
OneManArmy 82 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 We have a tie. Next vote will essentially decide everything so, think carefully before you do. classic tsundere (don't make her too agressive, please) Update: Adding Heterochromia to final heroine (dark green and indigo blue) why? because it's a bloody great idea!!! DDDD +1 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 Update: OMA broke the tie 5th Heroine: Classic Tsundere/ Tsundere Type A 5th heroine appearance FINAL: Straight long Onyx hair, average build, heterochromia (green, blue), clear skin, humble fronts. Expect screenshot, later on Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 (edited) Final heroine: Meet Kagami Satsuki (desi came up with her name http://i.imgur.com/94YyTzr.png http://i.imgur.com/b2wbPTD.png Edited October 16, 2013 by Helvetica Standard Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Chocolatemilkgod 16 Posted October 16, 2013 Share Posted October 16, 2013 (edited) Heterochromia ftw My dream heroine has been expanded to being a heterochromic kuudere-esque introvert eccentric scientist tomboy...so at least she fills one of those criteria. Edited October 16, 2013 by Chocolatemilkgod Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 16, 2013 Author Share Posted October 16, 2013 Heterochromia ftw My dream heroine has been expanded to being a heterochromic kuudere-esque introvert eccentric scientist tomboy...so at least she fills one of those criteria. She's beautiful ain't she? Things go well when you create a heroine in community XD, desi came up with her name, btw :3 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Geass 17 Posted October 17, 2013 Share Posted October 17, 2013 Disappointed she doesn't have Geass but... GOD DAMMIT SHE'S CUTE Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Gerard the Lone Wolf 10 Posted October 17, 2013 Share Posted October 17, 2013 ...meh Quote Link to post Share on other sites
OneManArmy 82 Posted October 17, 2013 Share Posted October 17, 2013 She's beautiful ain't she? She should wear a slightly longer skirt though, you can see her ass in the second picture. Heterochromia ftw That's what I'm telling everyone since ages. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Chocolatemilkgod 16 Posted October 17, 2013 Share Posted October 17, 2013 She should wear a slightly longer skirt though, you can see her ass in the second picture. I second the longer skirt, everything else is great though. And I know heterochromia is awesome, just look at my avatar ^^ ...meh Why gerard angry O: Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 17, 2013 Author Share Posted October 17, 2013 Why gerard angry O: Gerry wanted a kuudere yakuza eyepatch katana wielding heroine. Satsuki doesn't meet any of those requirements... XD Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Helvetica Standard 17 Posted October 17, 2013 Author Share Posted October 17, 2013 She should wear a slightly longer skirt though, you can see her ass in the second picture. I second the longer skirt, Man, you're hard to please! Her sprites are complete, you should have told me yesterday right after she was created. XD You don't have to worry as her sprite wont expose her unmentionables in any way and her casual outfit is on the conservative side. As I was saying in the SB last night... I can't believe I haven't included a single blasted pantyshot in my VN! I foking love pantyshots! urgh...must..resist...must resist... Quote Link to post Share on other sites
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