Hello there, Nono! ;3
As a fellow VN developer and programmer I wish you the best of luck in your project.
Work hard and don't be discouraged when things get tough. (Cause they will be)
Now my opinions and suggestions:
-It looks promising. I'll be checking your progress!
-What scripting platform are you using? I'm curious.
-Name box overlaps with text frame. Is this intentional? Just asking.
-Combat has a classic feel to it, basic but fun! Genius.
-Maybe it's on my end but I can't seem to get anywhere on the combat minigame. (2 blocks up and after that I can't cross the street.)
-I'm assuming this is something you're doing on your own? Get help, you'd be surprised how many people are out there who would gladly aid you in your project (I know because I also started on my own.)
-I myself would love to help you out but I'm programming in python and I use the renpy engine. I have no knowledge of C or the engine you're using.
-May I suggest a different font? The one you're using doesn't fit the dark mood of your VN, IMO.
-Maybe you should put a on-screen button to summon the menu?
Overall, I like how your VN is fleshing out. Keep at it, I'll be following your project!