Chocolatemilkgod

Yay, more progress

Subahibi... soon

If they don't like messing with H-scenes, fine by me. I don't play story VNs for that content either, unless it's done in a tasteful or useful way (which is rare...if ever, to be honest). So, all in all, good they're sticking to their beliefs...also it saves me some ctrl skipping.

I love that picture actually, great job! (Now all you need is to use custum backgrounds for EVERYTHING... )

I'd very quickly put that up in spoiler tags. Just do [.spoiler=Little Busters End Game Spoiler] TEXT [./spoiler] without the dots. And the interpretation is interesting, at least. I don't know if I'd 100% agree with it, but it's definitely something to think about.

For fucks sake -.- . If he had time to write comments and a giant ebook, why couldn't he have spent more time on making the translation?!

Shiiiiiiiiit. I was hoping it'd be an improvement...I'll wait until I hear more, but it's still disappointing...

O: How long is each chapter right now? An hour ish or more? Just curious.

Ooooh, . The changes are subtle, but I definitely like the improvement. The hand-drawn aesthic helps to break up that was mainly solid colour before, which is pretty . Not sure whether I like the changes just to the hair or to the whole uniform yet, though.

Don't forget to send a copy to Aeru as well so we can get him/her/other to translate into high quality Japanese.

I second the longer skirt, everything else is great though. And I know heterochromia is awesome, just look at my avatar ^^ Why gerard angry O:

Heterochromia ftw My dream heroine has been expanded to being a heterochromic kuudere-esque introvert eccentric scientist tomboy...so at least she fills one of those criteria.

You're lumping tsundere and kuudere together?! They're completely different entities, blasphemer! Burn the witch! Dandere-Kuudere, maybe...Still prefer introvert lovable kuudere

Hope kuudere (of some type) wins (need to have the 'just introverted' type). And blue eyes = Edit: Aw shit OMA, heterochromia (with blue and green eyes) O: Why didn't I think about that before...

Hmmmm...I mean there's certainly different ways to go about it, sort of depends. It might be the type of thing where you'll have to write a little bit and see whether it works or not. You could have brief glimpses of the other characters in the hallway in previous chapters to not really 'introduce' them as such, but just to give a little bit of playful foreshadowing. Or maybe have a rumour circulate around about one of them just to make the reader a little interested. You might want the other heroine to not actually attend their school, that might be an interesting dynamic (if you want, you co

Yes, but I often try to empathize with the main character and 'put myself in their shoes'. It usually makes reading a lot more enjoyable for me; that's what I mean by 'real life'. Sure, I don't expect crazy mecha or magic in real life, but I do like trying to get into the story.

Lucia is an exception, I guess. It's more of a comedy end to a scene rather than the her main attributes. Moreover her route was my favourite in rewrite so I was willing to overlook it. But, generally, not physical aggressive tsundere is better (like ones that just flip out and grab the collar of my shirt aren't cool, they'd just piss me off in real life). I'll have to think about the other heroine type I want

my thoughts: My main issue with the whole thing is that it felt a little...brusque. I know it's an alpha and that you'll probably embellish on it before release, but I would have preferred if the story was a little slower paced (with editing/additions this will pad it out slightly). Slightly slower writing will help draw focus to the serious parts when they actually arise (the KEY dogma ); it's a bit of a precarious spot since you definitely don't want to pad it out too much at all (don't turn it into a through-and-through romcom!), but a little bit will probably make the pace a bit better.

For the record, I think you're overreacting. Part of the reason you haven't gotten much feedback is probably: A) The torrent is pretty on and off, and it took at least 24 hours to download for me (and I get 100 mbs^-1 internet speed). Yachi was saying he had the torrent and was just waiting for it to complete. I know there's a mega link now, but most people probably just stuck with the torrent (or didn't see the mega link post) B) Some people may have wanted to wait until the full release to play it and avoided the demo (I rarely ever play demos since I like to go in blind, for example)

Ja. Still reading as I'm in the middle of writing abstracts (not fun), but I'll hopefully give you my criticisms/suggestions soon! I'll probably list a whole bunch of things that you're already well aware of (since it is an alpha after all, haha), but hopefully at least some of the things I mention will be constructive. Story so far seems interesting, although maybe a little fast paced (this will probably resolve itself with both editing a little bit of fleshing out as the game moves on in development)? Probably not much of an issue though if it slows down a little after the immediate intr

Got it! Playing now

Connecting....connecting...connecting... God dammit >. Also, for the record, I don't mind at all how long it takes for the full game to come out. I'd actually be happier if it came out later but in a more polished form...Games that come out later polished are better than games that come out earlier and are less so...that said if you're confident you can polish everything off by January that's fine

Rarely if dan is there since he hates british people 3

No, he's just being hanako again. In a sec he'll shout "I'VEGOTTOGODOSOMETHING". So kawaii

I could do some minor voice acting if it's, like, a narrator or something that doesn't have much to say I'll try to sound like filch . And if OMA sang the ED (with a desi duet!!) that'd be the best thing in the world. Dammit, it'd be so cool if there was a composer for the music though... EDIT: It should sound like , except replace yoshino in the lyrics and pictures with utli and have it play after the yaoi true end. Do it.