Okay Finish the demo and here is some feedback   
The writing/story is interesting so far, the introduction and the bit of characters backstory is inviting for me   
The Mindstrom concept is good, I like how you mix in the real psychology theories stuffs in too, since I once studies those in my university time mentioning them and involve them in the story made the suspension of disbelief stronger.   
there are some anime related cliche here and there which I dont mind since it suppose to be VN style.   
And compare to the demo 1.0 having those popup CG (phone, blackboard etc.) really improve the reading pleasure 
Now I like to knew more and how will it end, So keep up a good work   
Ps. I still thinks the "raining outside" sound is still like a dragging something around sound 
Ps II. How long did a chapter last? It still feel like the demo is only half of a chapter 1 to me